January 28, 2010 - 4:28 pm
well, I know this seemes stupid but really I need opinons about this. I am actually writing plotlines for this anime site(hasn’t ben created yet didn’t get to a computer in a while) and I just feel its not quite right. the setting is in a distant future that’s not what anyone would exspect, in fact it seemes in the past, but all devices made from a certain time(hadn’t made my mind about the date of the disaster) are in the ruens(some of them are used,but usually in an emergancy). I’m not following one main character, it might be 6 to 12(too much? I really want to explore the vew points of them, don’t coment this unles u have a good point in it). I don’t want to name the disaster because people can make their own gess of it and no confict is involved. The date I chose for the opening is 2067, but I think it’s too early. The two character I open with are Diana, a lowclass(poor to middle class) 13 year old girl who works in the fealds and has amazing strength.
sorry I was running out of space. The other character, a 14 year old named Able(I plan to make it for short once I think of a name), is a royal prince in China who is, well, he hates anyone who thinks ill of him(he is upset because he is believed to be a mistake that should have died at first chance what supports this is the fact someone was payed off to kill him by inferno whict has failed but left scars on his arms and back).
well, let me clear a few things. one this isn’t like ghost in the shell, like I said it is NOT futureistic, it was more based in a past sence because of the disaster. it really is suppost to seam like Fullmetal Alchemist, Bleach, and other anime and magna like those. well, another thing I didn’t mention, both characters I have discribed are out of the ordinary. oh and what I ment about inferno, a person whom can make fire baced killings seam like an accident, how it fails? you’ll find out.
Ok, first let meb e a critic. Your story’s really cool and it does have anice view, my point of view. I like it but, 2067? And you said it’s too early? Unless the big world disaster happens in 2020, that date is far too far. I like Diana’s character and she sounds fierce and so’s tha Chinese prince.Fire meets fire (if that’s what you’re thinking of, of course), that’ll be good. Just one thing, I know you don’t want anyone criticising on the 6 to 12 m.characters but, I really have to say something about that. Would you really remamber thair names and characteristics? I mean, you can write them out somewhere but that’ll be alot of work and people don’t like having too many things to do at onetime. Think about it.
I think that’s about it. There’s more actually but I really have other things to do but your question was just too deceiving and I jus HAD to have a peek. Anyway, bye.